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Dr. Autismo

Dr. Autismo

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(it's just an idea for a story, I'm not too good at writing anymore, nor do I do much drawing.)

Possible story names:

.Frightened to death.

.the lurker/lingerer


Synopsis:

On a cold, rainy night, in a sprawling UK metropolis, 110 years after a global nuclear war, the police are investigating a murder scene.

The victims are 5 male pakis and 2 female pakis whom were notorious in the local community for dealing drugs, trafficking white UK children and selling improvised weapons.
All them have been found dead in their sharehouse after the neighbours noticed they were missing.
The forensics team concluded that they have been dead for nearly 5 days. (113 hours)

This wasn't a murder by a rival family or other ethnicity.
They were all murdered in a way that doesn't match other killings caused by ethnic rivalry.

Their bodies were stabbed multiple times with an unknown bladed object and their faces.... Their twisted in fear and horror.
It's like they died of fright before getting stabbed to death.

This method of death matches similar previous killings by an individual, or group over the past few months.

Nearby cctvs were hacked into and shut off, so there's no footage of the perpetrator.
But the owner of a nearby cornor shop spotted a suspicious individual around the time of the killings.

The individual is described as an extremely tall and broad possible male with long, messy blonde hair and wearing a black coat and white mask.
The witness did not see the individuals face.

After describing the appearance of the individual to a police image generating AI, these 3 images were produced.

Download 2
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This individual, or one similar to then has been spotted in the area of previous killings of a similar M.O.
It is unknown if they are the same individual or a group of similarly dressed individuals.

We believe he may be a member of this moral supremacist death cult that violent murders criminals.

This cult is not an unified organisation, more like an ideological movement that spun off numerous other groups with their agenda, motives and political and religious alignments.

Some of these groups have been identified, and it's members have been imprisoned or died resisting arrest.
But the possibe group this individual belongs to is not identitied by the authorities.

So far, there have been no known murders of a similar M.O by this specific individual or group of individuals after this one.

The police have issued a warning over their socials and the news to the general public, to report this individual immediately.
Whatever they do, absolutely do not approach them, as they are believed to be armed and highly dangerous.

The end(?)
 
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Terrible, isn't it?
 
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Hopefully this becomes a reality soon :feelsLSD:

You should change it so that he leaves them all impaled on sticks, vlad tepes style. That would fit the motivations better
 
Hopefully this becomes a reality soon :feelsLSD:
The depiction of bong SOYciety has been exaggerated for the sake of drama, action and audience engagement for the story
You should change it so that he leaves them all impaled on sticks, vlad tepes style. That would fit the motivations better
That would take took much time and it's not as raw and visceral as being stabbed to death
 
Sounds interesting.

How would you develop it further?

Would it be a short story or more of a novel?
 
How would you develop it further?
Give him a rogues gallery to fight.

These villains would wear customes and assume the role of monsters, shedding their humanity in the process.

These villains are absolutely violent, disgusting and repulsive, and as the mc fights them, he wonders if he's any different from them.

It's reminiscent of that nietzsche quote: he who fights monsters much make sure he doesn't become a monster.
Would it be a short story or more of a novel?
Web comics
 
Absolutely love this. Way better than the stories I've thought of.
 
Nigger just let them pakis sell drugs who cares unless they molest children leave them alone nigga , if come crackhead wants their dose who the f cares bro.
I d recommend you this channel it s from a guy that used to be in british patriotic circles for decades actually and he says the british far right is beyond saving and that they won t do anything , the recent nigel farage shift shows it , they re center right at best in reality i d even say they re psyops.

View: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ab4FTmvENEY
 
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Terrible, isn't it?
I enjoyed reading it
 
Rate dis sheeeit @Grodd
 
sounds like a manifestation of the Wrath of God being released upon bioweapons
i love it
could do with a slightly creepier face
pic 1 i think is the best, make his eyes a little more similar to Sinister (just a thought, maybe small cracks/dark wrinkles around the eyes would suffice) and a slighlty creepier smile
 
Sounds pretty racist.

Paki drug dealers and human traffickers.

This won't become mainstream.
 
Suits me, it'll be an underground webcomic
But if you want the big shekels, you have to sell out.
You know that, right?

I thought it would be about that enhanced assassin whom you've drawn earlier.

This sounds more like a horror comic.
 
But if you want the big shekels, you have to sell out.
You know that, right?

I thought it would be about that enhanced assassin whom you've drawn earlier.

This sounds more like a horror comic.
This is the same assassin, the story has a urban, gothic horror touch
 
This is the same assassin, the story has a urban, gothic horror touch
So, then what the eye witnesses have described was an exaggeration, probably caused by their own fear.
 
So, then what the eye witnesses have described was an exaggeration, probably caused by their own fear.
No, their accurate, but the artstyle of the ai pics were exaggerated for effect
 
How come?
I thought the witnesses would be so shocked that they'd see things that weren't there and give a descibtion of a perp that was exaggerated.
 
I thought the witnesses would be so shocked that they'd see things that weren't there and give a descibtion of a perp that was exaggerated.
Hes the mc of the story, he's very real, but some stories focus on other characters POV, and they cross paths with the mc.

This gives him some mystery as he slips in and out the story
 
Could do with a bit more character development
 
How the fuck has the UK recovered from a nuclear war within 110 years to the point they are able to use a.i.
 
If the only members of a certain demographic in your story are villains, it can come across as cleche and predictable.
Realistically, most violent crime in western countries is carried out by non whites, but our mc here does encounter some white villains here and therw
How the fuck has the UK recovered from a nuclear war within 110 years to the point they are able to use a.i.
Because nuclear war happened in an unspecified future and the borders of the british isles have large blazer cannons stationed along them to shoot down any incoming nuclear warheads.
The various islands dotted across the isles like Jersey, the isle of man, the isle of wight, Shetland and the northern Scottish archipelago also had these canons.

Some warheads got through, obliterating London, Manchester, Birmingham and the entire South-West, but the northern English regions, southern Scotland and the top half of wales survived.
The human survivors regrouped, reorganised and continued their civilizationn as a sprawling metropolis, with Glasgow being the capital.
 
Because nuclear war happened in an unspecified future and the borders of the british isles have large blazer cannons stationed along them to shoot down any incoming nuclear warheads.
The various islands dotted across the isles like Jersey, the isle of man, the isle of wight, Shetland and the northern Scottish archipelago also had these canons.

Some warheads got through, obliterating London, Manchester, Birmingham and the entire South-West, but the northern English regions, southern Scotland and the top half of wales survived.
The human survivors regrouped, reorganised and continued their civilizationn as a sprawling metropolis, with Glasgow being the capital.
im not very knowledgeable about uk, but even with what you wrote i dont think the uk would even be able to recover that quickly from that much damage especially because of other effects of nukes.

And how does the nuclear war shape your story setting, it honestly feels like something like a fun fact. Nukes used in the history of something is usually there to explain why things are.
 
im not very knowledgeable about uk, but even with what you wrote i dont think the uk would even be able to recover that quickly from that much damage especially because of other effects of nukes.

And how does the nuclear war shape your story setting, it honestly feels like something like a fun fact. Nukes used in the history of something is usually there to explain why things are.
The nuclear war is more of a background thing, an event in this stories history.
 
The nuclear war is more of a background thing, an event in this stories history.
Is just that a nuclear war would just change things by a huge amount that when you described the synopsis it kinda feels like you could have left the nuke out and its impact wouldn't been changed much. Its hard to describe the feeling so thats the best I can describe its.
 

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