It's Over My first "poem"

[ubermensch666]

While you were discovering life, I was stuck.
While you were feeling the heat, I was freezing at rock bottom.
While you were enjoying it, I was enjoying my darkness.
And now that I'm tearing your world apart, you ask me why I'm doing this?

 

[trying to ascend]

Where are the rhymes?

 

[ubermensch666]

Where are the rhymes?

I wrote in my first language and they have losted by it

 

[trying to ascend]

I wrote in my first language and they have losted by it

Escreve em português aqui

 

[gattsu]

Escreve em português aqui

Are you brazillian?

 

[trying to ascend]

Are you brazillian?

Are you too?

 

[gattsu]

I also wrote a poem:

Niggers.
Niggers, niggers, niggers.
Fuck niggers.
Niggers.

Hope you liked it.

 

[Govid_Dorious]

Escreve em português aqui

 

[gattsu]

Are you too?

No. I do think it's interesting that I found many of them here.

 

[Govid_Dorious]

 

[ubermensch666]

Escreve em português aqui

Enquanto você estava descobrindo a vida, eu estava preso.
Enquanto você estava sentindo o calor, eu estava congelando no fundo do poço.
Enquanto você estava curtindo, eu estava planejando minha vingança na escuridão.
E agora que eu estou destruindo seu mundo, você me pergunta por que estou fazendo isso?

Acho que não rima, de qualquer forma. Mas eu escrevi com o coração.

 

[Savage]

pretty good, although I feel the last line is slightly unjustified as you've said you're content with/enjoying darkness but then say

And now that I'm tearing your world apart, you ask me why I'm doing this?