How shitty is my poem

[steppenwolf]

Once upon a misty daytime,
I was sipping on worlds sorrow,
What I feel shall not be tomorrow.

Seeking ways to drop the sadness,
Sadness goes and anger comes,
Turning all around in madness,
Heavy feeling in my lungs.

Entering the tree field,
Surrounding masses,
The plant revealed,
My hand it crashes.

Crashes once,
Crashes twice,
I feel my bones,
I feel like ice.

Red hands, poor trees,
Not my fault dear wood,
The anger it flees,
Lol I'm rude

 

[NEETAndTidy]

2/10

 

[Newbie17]

Not bad, Shakespearecel, I like imagery in this one, but a bit out-of-place ending tbh

 

[steppenwolf]

Not bad, Shakespearecel, I like imagery in this one, but a bit out-of-place ending tbh

yeah in the end I couldnt come up with anything and also I maybe placed that lol there because I wanna make the whole thing seem like a joke so I can defend myself better by saying its not serious if anyone tells me its bad because i hate myslf

 

[landocalarisian]

I dig

 

[CC_retard]

6/10

 

[ColdPillow]

Dude your rhyme scheme sucks 2/10