Lordgoro1
What is Evil, really?
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It's a true hybrid of past memoir in the present tense, as in a conversation. Need opinions on the OPENING PAGE/passage! Does it grab ya as a reader, and compel you to read on and see where it might go? This is brand new, and the event happened to me, so I'm telling it in this manner. So Opinions are welcome:
"Tribulations of a Clown"
"One crowded evening, I was strolling down the busily blinking midway, finally and gleefully free to see the sights and lights. With Kaleidoscopic colors thrilling my young eyes.
Hi. I'm Johnny D, and I'm a carnival clown, and not the only one. There are a few of us, lurking around, here and there. Now ya see us, now ya don't. As quick as a discarded colored hairpiece and red nose and we are one of you, a “normal” person, or a “mark”, as the barkers label them. The barkers, those are the slicksters running the rigged games, the booming voices bidding you tales of prizes and glory. Y'all know it's only hopes and shadows, but y'all as marks still choose to play our games anyway! Jokes on you, you'll never win unless you learn their secrets, and yes, there are secrets here."
"Tribulations of a Clown"
"One crowded evening, I was strolling down the busily blinking midway, finally and gleefully free to see the sights and lights. With Kaleidoscopic colors thrilling my young eyes.
Hi. I'm Johnny D, and I'm a carnival clown, and not the only one. There are a few of us, lurking around, here and there. Now ya see us, now ya don't. As quick as a discarded colored hairpiece and red nose and we are one of you, a “normal” person, or a “mark”, as the barkers label them. The barkers, those are the slicksters running the rigged games, the booming voices bidding you tales of prizes and glory. Y'all know it's only hopes and shadows, but y'all as marks still choose to play our games anyway! Jokes on you, you'll never win unless you learn their secrets, and yes, there are secrets here."