My Incel novel - Nineteen Eighty WHORE

[RippedRichandIncel]

Hey boyos, if you want to read a blackpilled book, I'm attaching the first chapter.


SOFT SPOILERS: It's like a matriatrchal 1984 + The Trial + Metamorphosis. So bascially, it's a perfect descrpition of the West in 15 years.

Let me know what you think and if you want to read any more.

 

[AnonAutist]

Don't call it a novel. This is a short story at best.

 

[RippedRichandIncel]

Don't call it a novel. This is a short story.

It's chapter 1 chief. Unlike my life, it's not over.

 

[AnonAutist]

It's chapter 1 chief. Unlike my life, it's not over.

I see.

You plan on serializing this novel?

 

[RippedRichandIncel]

I see.

You plan on serializing this novel?

Nah, I'm going to just sell it /give it away. I just wanted to hear people's views, and they're more likely to read a short chapter than a 60pg pdf lmao

 

[Animecel2D]

Will read

 

[Tenshi]

Will read

 

[RippedRichandIncel]

I look forward to your feedback boyo

 

[Deleted member 21230]

Will read

 

[Deleted member 24333]

Huh, I'll give it a try

 

[Deleted member 27159]

This is quite a good read. Excellent detail and great story. But you kept saying patriarch instead of matriarch many times. You need to change that. But overall the story is pretty promising and you should consider making it a book

 

[RippedRichandIncel]

This is quite a good read. Excellent detail and great story. But you kept saying patriarch instead of matriarch many times. You need to change that. But overall the story is pretty promising and you should consider making it a book

Hey sorry if it's unclear so far, but the female party in charge calls themselves 'The Patriarchy' so that they can gaslight people about the patriarchy always being in charge. It should make more sense if you read later chapters!

This is quite a good read. Excellent detail and great story. But you kept saying patriarch instead of matriarch many times. You need to change that. But overall the story is pretty promising and you should consider making it a book

But thank you bro! I think I'll be finished in a month or less with a first draft, I hope it'll be a fun read for us

 

[Deleted member 27159]

Hey sorry if it's unclear so far, but the female party in charge calls themselves 'The Patriarchy' so that they can gaslight people about the patriarchy always being in charge. It should make more sense if you read later chapters!

Oh ok. I thought it was accidental. I guess they will use it to manipulate people into thinking that foids are still oppressed even though they are the oppressors.

But thank you bro! I think I'll be finished in a month or less with a first draft, I hope it'll be a fun read for us

Good luck.

 

[RippedRichandIncel]

Oh ok. I thought it was accidental. I guess they will use it to manipulate people into thinking that foids are still oppressed even though they are the oppressors.

Good luck.

Yeah that's exactly right!

 

[DirtyCurryCell]

I think you spelt Patriachy at places when you meant matriachy.

The second para is too much. Too much flavour lol. Tone it down a bit, because it feels like man described in a way a male writer would describe a sexy women. Which is fine. But tone it down so it flows smoothly.

Still reading, will provide feedback as we go.

Here's a tip for editing, read it out loud, if it becomes hard for you to read smoothly, then edit it, no matter how beautiful the prose is.

 

[RippedRichandIncel]

I think you spelt Patriachy at places when you meant matriachy.

The second para is too much. Too much flavour lol. Tone it down a bit, because it feels like man described in a way a male writer would describe a sexy women. Which is fine. But tone it down so it flows smoothly.

Still reading, will provide feedback as we go.

Here's a tip for editing, read it out loud, if it becomes hard for you to read smoothly, then edit it, no matter how beautiful the prose is.

Regarding the Patriarchy comment, I mentioned earlier in this thread that that's intentional. The females call their party the Patriarchy party as a part of their gaslighting campaign.

Thank you for the depth of your feedback, I look forward to the rest!

 

[DirtyCurryCell]

Hey boyos, if you want to read a blackpilled book, I'm attaching the first chapter.


SOFT SPOILERS: It's like a matriatrchal 1984 + The Trial + Metamorphosis. So bascially, it's a perfect descrpition of the West in 15 years.

Let me know what you think and if you want to read any more.

Okay I read the whole thing.
It's pretty good.
There were foids saying 2 + 2 = 5. So you might wanna incorporate that into the novel.

You're a brave boyo for posting this here. Because if you ever finish the novel and publish it, you will be doxxed indefinetely.

Regarding the Patriarchy comment, I mentioned earlier in this thread that that's intentional. The females call their party the Patriarchy party as a part of their gaslighting campaign.

Thank you for the depth of your feedback, I look forward to the rest!

Ah, okay, that makes sense.

 

[RippedRichandIncel]

Okay I read the whole thing.
It's pretty good.
There were foids saying 2 + 2 = 5. So you might wanna incorporate that into the novel.

You're a brave boyo for posting this here. Because if you ever finish the novel and publish it, you will be doxxed indefinetely.

Ah, okay, that makes sense.

It's going to be published under a fake name for sure. No way I can let my real name be attached to this if i ever want to go outside again.

 

[DirtyCurryCell]

It's going to be published under a fake name for sure. No way I can let my real name be attached to this if i ever want to go outside again.

I will buy it for sure.

 

[RippedRichandIncel]

I will buy it for sure.

Cheers boyo. I'll be sure to make a post in a month or so when it's available

 

[DirtyCurryCell]

Cheers boyo. I'll be sure to make a post in a month or so when it's available

check your messages boyo

 

[Michinomiya Hirohit]

2 dumb to read pls make audio book reee

 

[RippedRichandIncel]

2 dumb to read pls make audio book reee

I have incel voice, may some deepvoice cel would record it for me.

 

[Michinomiya Hirohit]

I have incel voice, may some deepvoice cel would record it for me.

Some one do Th is

 

[Deleted member 140]

Damn bro haven't seen you since r/incels was banned

 

[LeDepravedCel]

Nice typesetting

I liked it tbh. Got thrown off guard a bit by the trigonometry comparison on the first page. It felt forced and fits kinda awkwardly.

 

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I read it.

 

[Nicotine]

I read it.

Me too tbh. I’d read more if it existed.

 

[AlexanderTheGreat11]

Will read

 

[PPEcel]

Not bad.